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| scribble it 2008-08-18 ch 1,  | abusehahahah, I love this! Its so similar to the kind of conversations my mom and I have in the morning... although less about sex... and I don't know any cheerleaders. Being British and all. I thought it was great- I'd love to meet Jane as well, she sounds like my kind of girl :P |
| RodeoGirl 2008-08-15 ch 1, | abuseSince I read the whole thing I might as well review. The conversations did not seem realistic. Some of the words and topics were not, "mother daughter" conversations. I can't see this conversation without the mother screaming her head off at the daughter for using such languange. But that is just my oponion. Sorry if I sound harsh! |
| j.c-chic 2008-01-10 ch 1, | abuseHAHAHAHA |
| Shadows in the Fire 2007-01-31 ch 1, | abuseAmazing. The title was lame, but the story was crazy good. Like those pop-tart commertials :-) Anyways, I was awed. You have potintial...get out there and do something with it. -Amber |
| temblance 2007-01-03 ch 1, | abuseThis was really humorous, probably because it sounded so true. I could picture this happening between a lot of mothers and daughters out there. Nice job. |
| bluerinse 2006-11-29 ch 1, | abusehaha it's good but what made it better was when i mistakenly read: “...Why are you taking a pillow in there?...” as: “...Why are you talking to a pillow in there?!” thus i thought the entire conversation (except for the very last bit) was actually Jane talking to herself, going through what her mother might say when she comes knocking on her door telling her to get up... hehe silly me > |
| Micchansan 2006-11-15 ch 1, | abuseIt's so cute! It looks 'ramblish' (is that even a word? bleh), but somehow it let me know about the different thoughts a mother and a daughter have - in a positive and good way. I love it! |