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Reviews For: StrengthWeakness

half-sketched.staccatos
2007-06-16
ch 1,
abusekonban wa

I love that last line, how you didn't write "someone has to be strong" but "someone has to LOOK strong" - like you're not really strong and just pretending to be. That the only reason you don't do it is because you're too cowardly to do it.

Although it's a bit unnerving to think that that's what's stopping the cutting ...

Zaijen
-Shan-
Seventh Chords
2006-10-23
ch 1,
abuseVery nicely written. You've got a real flair for poetry; your ability to communicate your emotions and perspectives in such an earnest, yet poignant way is truly worthy of recognition.
concrete.stone
2006-10-22
ch 1,
abusewow...i think i got a tear...beautiful!
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