Wow, awesome freeverse. It seems like it is tumbling, you present a very strong feeling in this poem. I especially loved the last few lines, where it said "run for.ward into life." and my brain kind of read it as "run for your life." at the same time...that was pretty cool.

Not your best but still worth reading.

evocative...love the clockwork rhythm to it. Stop-starts. Ethereal.

I got a deja vu reading this. It's pretty good

I like how the stagnancy, or in the moment, thought process kind of stymies advancement. The natural elements help to create a timeless vacuum for the reader. Very well written.

Hey... You reviewed my poem a while back... A WHILE back. Sorry, this is pretty delayed, but I figured I owed you one... Or two... Probably more, because I liked this one so much. It's always amazing to find a poet who can rhyme, and be clever all the same. The way you formatted it was interesting, really... Keep it up, yeah? Maybe you'll be my inspiration.

I enjoyed how you entwined "time" and "breathe" in a single poem. Quite the artsy piece. Thank you for sharing, and I'll see you on a future update. - ADD-san

how do you capture all my feelings and put them into words that i can't even express to myself? talent, pure talent. :P
'dread the ever movement of
the past
the present
and
the future'

'never being able to re-live disasters or instances which brought the utmost contentment'
those lines were my favourite out of the whole poem. i know how much i dwell on memories that made my heart sing but time gradually dulls them so that they become no more than a speck of a memory and you can never relive that feeling ever again. how depressing.

it was a strong finish too - the last stanza's formatting worked well.

beautifully done, as usual.

infinite molecules
daring

i like the mysticism, and thankyoufor the review. sorry its taken meso long to review back.

! I like the structure !

wow i love the last stanza. nice work.

Yours is freaking beautiful.. like always..


You are so my hero!


HUGS

A very thoughtful poem, and well written too. I like the imagry here. Definatley keep writing.

wow, time and life... myterious. good work!!^^

keep writing