I really liked the theme ALOT! and it was well written. If it was a bit longer it might be one of my favorite favorite FictionPress stories ever. If you do think of continuing any of your poems you should continue this one :) BTW, Have a nice day.

I personally disagree with the note you left at the end of this. I think that the poem should stay the way it is. I like how the simple wording is understandable, making your message that much more relatable to people. The last two lines are great, they really make this poem. Great work, I like this a lot, and keep writing.

well i don't know about thought, but my creative writing teacher says "never use a lot. that is where you park cars." and for looks, i looked up in the thesaurus and maybe, introspection?