you know what? i enjoy this story just as well as cerulean harbor. maybe a little bit more than the latter though. now i'm off to try and read it on your forum that you speak of.

Your site is too difficult to navigate around.
How do I get the rest of the story.

i really want to read it though like umm its not wroking out for me i dont know how to use those forum thingies agh and i really got into it. Please help me i need to read

What I feel cheated...I don't remember reading the warning.

First off, *claps* for Becca.

It's a great story. For those who haven't signed up on her forum yet, shame on you. I understand that you all might be worried that you have to pay or something and the troublesome stuff which comes along, but it's worth it. She updates on that faster than on here, plus more awesome stories.

Also, this story has great descriptions and great character development. The author does not just focus on the characters, but on setting and plot too. Great job.

Almost forgot. Thank you to Maria for pointing out some of my errors. I wish you would have signed the review so I could have PMed you privately. I do so appreciate it.

I realize that many people find it difficult and I apologize for the disappointment. However, this and 3 other of my stories have been posted on my forums for forum members only. I use fictionpress to allow sneak peeks for those that want to check it out and see if it's worth posting for.

There are 4 stories (10 posts, 30 posts, 50 posts, and 100 posts) on my forum and the rest which are all MUCH longer then the forum stories are available on my website and on fictionpress for absolutely free. I'm sorry if this irrates people, but it is what I wrote these stories for.

Thank you for reading my novel, I appreciate it.

It's me again. I just re-read my previous review and found I sounded pretty angry. And I'm not - just irritated and disappointed.

Please consider putting the rest of it here though? :\

I'm sorry, but making readers register and post on your forum is stupid. I don't think I want to read your other works now for fear of having to sign up for something or worse, pay.

Seriously consider posting "all" of your stories on here instead of telling readers to accomplish these requirements.

I say again... stupid.

Aw, I like Durril a lot. He seems like such a nice guy, how could Valora not fall for him?

A few things I noticed:

"He should of never of allowed himself to grow..." should be "He should HAVE never allowed himself to grow..."

Had that happened, I may of asked my father should be May HAVE asked...

Moving on...

Me, again. I really like this so far. I have to say I already like Durril better than Blaine. How insulting for Valora that Blaine only wants her if she's pretty. He's a jackass. I look forward to more interaction between Valora and Durril.

Just a few minor grammatical/punctuation errors:

"...my father would of slaughtered..." Should be would HAVE

Am I suppose to honestly... "Suppose" should be "supposed"

When you say "he said" or "she said" it should be written with a comma and then lowercase ...," he said

“We will be fine, thank you.” He said... should be "...you," he said

This is entirely creative criticism. You're already an excellent writer, but I'm sure you want it to be as perfect as possible. On to the next chapter...

This is really good. I don't usually read regency type romances, but I love the triangle that is sure to form with the brothers and Lady Valora.

One thing I noticed that you have done a couple of times is say "might of", which should be "might have". Everything else seems fine, though.

There seems to be a bit of trouble with the happy couple. really good story so far, a very original plot line. I wonder how the brother feels with everything going on...

Hmm.. god descriptions. I like the way you've written this. PLease keep it up!!