Hey again. I decided to read another one. ^_^ I actually kind of like this one. On a scale of 1 to 10, I give this one a 7.

I agree with most of the poem.

You probably could have specified what kind of "people", which you introduced in line 16. Because you begin talking about the mundane "things", and then at the end you kind of introduce a new idea. Unless you meant from the beginning that it's also the people(which would apply to all the mundane ideas/aspects) that make you break?

you managed to put into words exactly how i feel. it's not pretty, is it? i hope you don't always feel this way, though. take care.