...wow. What words can I say that would possibly bring this justice? It's so beautiful, so tragic, so painful...

"It's over now the music of the night!"

I think this chapter summed up those words. How sad... *cries hysterically*. Bravi.

Your devoted reviewer,
Sarcastic Presence

NO
NO
NO
OMG UR A HORRIBLE PERSON I HOPE U ;ASKVJ;ASDKFJ
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omg... omg that's so... omg...
well... u def hav talent if u can draw in ur audience like that and have such a hard impact on us...
but JESUS CHRIST T.T
like i knew he'd never make it out alive but still...
such a sad but beautiful ending...
damn... -0- i'll miss this story...

Okay... gimme a sec here...

*sob*

My God, that was... beautiful. As I started reading, I just knew this would happen, and still I kept hoping he'd be ok...

I just can't get over how poignant that was. Brilliant, pj, absolutely brilliant! I've still got tears in my eyes. That parallel to the end of the show was perfect, and so sad... to have him sing "It's over now, the music of the night" in the most literal of terms...

*more sob*

I'm ok, really!

Beautiful story, so sad, so well done! Bravissima, mon amie!

~Emma

i love the characterization nd the shifting...
gah don't let him die in the middle of the show T.T

I can't wait until the performance! It's so tragic that Michael is going to die. :( But it's for the best, if it happens, I suppose.
Michael's Journal sounds pretty cool. For most of this story, you only hear it from Sandra, so maybe you can provide insight into what Michael is thinking throughout this. Then again, that might sound repetitive. I like Michael as a character. If I come up with anything cool, I'll let you know.

Presence

Oh, poor Michael... I'm so glad he'll be able to participate in opening night, but things aren't looking too good, are they? And it's really great that everyone's being so nice to him without simply having it be pity. That would be awful.

Looking forward to the next two chapters!

~Emma

this chapter was way to short ::bangs head against wall::

Filler? No.

The exchange of information between the two is interesting. It would be rare to find a person to talk freely with. The actual conversation is ok - it's not forced like it sometimes is with other stories, I like it.

Still reading,
Bread

Cute filler chapter. I don't really know what to say, mostly because it's almost 11:30 at night and I just wrote a paper about Nixon and Kissinger.
Three more chapters?! Aww... well, ok, but they better be good! And of course, they will be (I have faith in thee).

Presence

That was really good! A nice, light-hearted chat after the big whammy of the last chapter. The bit with the mouse was great!

Only three more? So sad. Looking forward to all of them!

~Emma

It's rare that I find a good story around here that actually keeps my attention for more than a minute. However, this was an exception. I was completely drawn into Sandra's outsider disposition in the first few paragraphs, and amazingly I had no trouble sticking with this story. I was impressed with your ability to create such intelligent characters, not to mention describe the setting without over- or underdoing it.

I have thoroughly enjoyed this story. I look forward to reading more (There had better be more! ;))

Anna

Ten out of ten for plot, though your actual prazing may need some work. Admittedly, it is a very good story - one of those books you don't put down until you've finished it. But I think a good story invovled more than just a good story line, it also needs the right words.

After finishing the story, I suggest a re-write, even if you just do parts of it at a time. Normally after some re-thinking, stories are fleshed out more and always better than the first draft. You'll have time to iron out some ideas, clarify some unclear points and make your story stand out (not that it doesn't already).

As for content, I kinda saw it comming, but it was still exciting to read. I like how something new happens in every chapter; there are no filler chapters that just waffle on.

Michael is getting more talkative and that's good, but I don't think you've had enough time to lead him into that sharing role. It would be good if you had more intemediate steps in between to make the transition from isolated strange man to friend more smoothly. I think you make a decent attempt at doing it, but it's just something to watch out for. People don't hcange overnight.

Again, a commendable effort with the mother for reasons I mentioned previously.

I don't hate you for possibly killing off Michael. In fact, it's an admirable thing for a young author to be able to kill off characters because normally, authors get too attached to characters. For the sake of the story, I approve of putting characters through a nessasry amount of hell. It really does make you a better writer.

Alrighty, that's it from me today. I know there's a bit more concrit that usual, but I thought that I'd try to be different to the other reviewers. This really is a good story.

Bread

You, my friend, are an evil cliffhanger woman.

But luckly, there's a new chapter, so I'll review more after i''ve read it.

*sprints to next chapter

Bread

Well, I certainly love you for this chapter! It's so sad... I just love it. What can I say?
I suppose I didn't need to write those 70 reviews to get you to update. Now I understand why Michael is so out of it. Poor kid! You wrote it well, as always. Poor Michael... this, actually, does remind me of Phantom, because in Leroux he dies of a broken heart shortly after he lets Christine go...here, it's another sort of heart problem.
Poor Michael!
On a side note, I updated The Point of No Return on my fanfic account... I'd like some of your imput. I also revised most of the other chapters, save 7. Nothing exceptionally major, but a few minor tweaks to fit in with the rest of the story.
But anyway, this is still my favorite story. Awesome.

Oh. My. God.

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Wow. I really do not know what to say. At all. I honestly don't know whether to hate you or love you for this (very well written as always) chapter... but I MOST DEFINITELY WILL hate you if you kill him. *sob* I had tears in my eyes when I finished this!

Loved how frank Sandra's mom was. I dunno if 'frank' is exactly the right word, but well... you know what I mean.

*more sob*

~Emma