i thought it was a little too, how do i say it, well unpoetic i guess? it was blunt and came across like reading sentences. however i guess the pacing helped to poetic-fy it (i'm making up words, sorry). the pacing was definately a strong point

Hi im Sandy,

we had science together in 7th grade, with Mrs. Charand, remember? Sorry for like abruptly reviewing your thing like this. Ayhow, can i just ask you one question? was this poem in the literary arts magazine in River Trail Middle? Oh and i really like it cause it feels natural, you know? Thanks.

-Sandy from your 7th grade science class