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| violet-eyez 2008-07-22 ch 55,  | abusei can't wait till this story starts up again, though is it coming to a conclusion? |
| lullaby1104 2008-07-05 ch 54, anon. | abuseHey, i love your story. so PLEASE update soon ^^ i wanna find out what happens next... so anxious =D |
| taa2s 2008-07-02 ch 54, anon. | abuseHi babe! Its been almost 6 full, anxious, nail bitting, finger sucking, seat gripping months of intense anticipation for the next update. Pls update soon! I want to know what goes on next with victor & darcy! |
| Steph 2008-06-15 ch 54, anon. | abuseYou'll be continuing on this story, yes? I really hope you do because I'm really enjoying it! |
| I Will Always Be S.tronger 2008-05-28 ch 54, | abuseSo I just spent God-knows how many hours reading this in it's entirity-- and I wasn't disappointed at all. It's an excellent piece of writing, I hpoe you are working on an update! |
| UNKNOWN 2008-05-10 ch 54, anon. | abuseiGNOR WHAT "eternally-yours SAYS". YOUR STORY IS DA BOMB. UPDATE SOON! |
| Unknown 2008-05-04 ch 54, anon. | abusePlease hurry up and update! :) I want to know what happens next! |
| COULK 2008-04-29 ch 54, | abusethis story is so amazing update soon please and i hope they get back together and you show more of Dillion i want to know what happens to hiM XOXOXO Love COULK |
| wintercandy 2008-04-27 ch 54, anon. | abusehow can you leave me hanging for bout 2 months? =( please post soon~ |
| Lifesong Everlasting 2008-04-09 ch 29, | abuseI can finally review this story. Been reading it for some time but since i wasn't a member of the site yet i didn't think that you would take it seriously but now i am so yay for that! I love this story even though as of yet i have no idea exactly where it is going. The fact that Victor is the guy that Darcy has to marry was a bit predictable but i love the fact that his brother just appeared out of nowhere, that was cool. Are Victor and Darcy gonna end up...i should say is Darcy gonna end up loving him back because that would be a bit too mills and boons like and cliche. I love Fox he is one of my favourite characters is he coming back into the story or what? Ok now i need to go and reread this thing because i might be talking rubbish here. ADVERT:read my story(short but hopefully effective) ha ha! see ya and keep on writing! |
| taa2s 2008-04-08 ch 54, anon. | abusehello! update pls! its more than a month since the last one and i want to know what happens next! |
| 2lazy2signin 2008-03-31 ch 54, anon. | abuseOh my god this is so good! I think it took me like three days to read it but I enjoyed every second of it! I love your style. Update really soon |
| arydesia 2008-03-25 ch 2, | abuseOkay, forgot to mention this in my last review. You have run-on sentences in some places, and you mix-up your tenses sometimes. One moment it'll be past, and the next it'll be present. Also, with the dialogue - you use the word 'stated' many times. It gets repetitive and slightly annoying. Use a thesaurus or just leave it off altogether. You don't always have to mention 'he/she said' at the end of quotations. Sounds interesting so far! |
| arydesia 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuseNot many mistakes, but there are a few connotation errors. For example: “I don’t need to” He stated sternly. Simply forgot the comma after 'to'. I think I spotted one or two typos, also. I think you meant 'surly' as 'surely. Cute story! lol I'm all for vampire fics! |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 54, | abusewhat happens next? please write some more... |