A great twist on a children's tale. I don't think I can look at Peter Pan the same again though.

wonderful imagery and it's perfectly tragic in a way that makes it refreshingly original and uncliche (not a word but it will do).

this is really, really cool. i love the repetition. the last part's absolutely perfect. this is one of the best peter pan allusions i've seen. the only thing i'd say is that it's a tiny bit cliche with the symbols and text decorating. but y'know, i guess that's in nowadays. i don't really know. either way, it's still a great write.

hm I kinda like this one, it has a good idea behind it...but i'm not sure if i quite get it...and i most definatly don't get the "thick ankles and long black hair" part but i really like your idea of Peter Pan's perscription for never-never land. very cool

once again, kinda screwy but pretty cool.

oh my god, this is gorgeous. the format is amazing. there are a lot of poems on here like this, but this is different and just beautiful. i love it.

Gorgeous. I thought this would be just like all the other twisted-fairytale poems, and in some ways it is, but there's just :more: to this. I read the 'jell-o shot thick' line, and the setting just changed. The repetition of 'oh, peter' is wonderful, the format is great, and the last line two lines are amazing.