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K.Andrews 2007-03-23 . chapter 12
Nice how you contrast these so well, a girl killing her mother and going on the run next to a couple going to the prom.. they're equally significant when written nicely.
K.Andrews 2007-03-23 . chapter 8
"None of these thing worked and the only point I want to make is this: Parents don't try to force your expectations on your kids, because if you do it never works out in the end."
A bit too obvious with the moral of the story thing, but I take your point. It's a sad situation when parents can't accept their own child, but I like how you haven't done it with over-the-top angst.
K.Andrews 2007-03-23 . chapter 2
Oh, if I can't personally relate to "Uncomfortable", I can sympathise. Interesting choice of name for a (I'm assuming - my maths does let me down) teen mother to name her child, Lolita?
Frore 2006-10-23 . chapter 1
Such a cute drabble. I like vignettes - just enough to get your attention without going over the top.
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