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Cianna Greenwood 2006-10-23 . chapter 1
I liked this. It feels genuine, and I like the development of the idea. Only one thing that throws me off: when you use the word "crazy" in line fourteen. For some reason, it jars me a little; maybe it is because I was expecting "mad". Whatever the reason, you may want to reconsider the word choice. Other than that, though, I rather enjoyed it. ^_^ It was very sweet.
Frore 2006-10-23 . chapter 1
Certainly a cute poem. While none of the metaphors are innovative, this piece has a sentimental feel to it, which certainly keeps the reader’s attention until the last line. I think a rhyme scheme might help this composition along a little.
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