Wow, great ending! And great story; I thought it was very well written. Keep writing!

ok well i believe that this one is made up right?

um cause if it's not i kinda worry. well i have to bet that it is since how would anyone know it if it's not??

very interesting. people know that this happens.. even if not often.

they will be found. great job.

Oh, my goodness, I didn't expect that at the end! GREAT twist...this was really good.

Jack is an evil little booger, isn't he. This was cool, if a bit cheesy. I liked it, and that was a nice twist at the end. Good job. :)

~S. Sage.

PS. Thanks for the review/compliment. A new author always appreciates them. ^.^

This is wonderful. I love these types of stories-we wrote them in english once. Microfiction, I think it's called. Yours is great, and has an excellent little twist. Very enjoyable and well-written.

Thanks for your review! Oh, and I love your pen name.

-Xerophyte

Good description and dialogue. Felt like I was really with the cops, it seems whenver I write, I can never get the lingo down. But anywats, is this part of another story and are you posting a secound chapter?

You had me me reeled in from the start XD! You know, the ending was quite a cliffhanger. It would be interesting to read more into this story.

Curse You Gold-toothed man! Sheesh, I don't think I could ever write suspense(or spell it!) But, this was excellent.

Sincerely,
Emma Noble

Way good! I like the twist in this.

You like stories of guns and shooting dont you? ^_^ It was fantastic, like the last, but this had a twist to it. Good work.

oo kinda creepy but really good. I love the gold tooth in the beginning annd end again. loved it

I liked this. It was really tense, and you really captured my attention, in a different way than last time. The way you wrote the plot was really awesome! And the way you revealed who the culprit was, was really nice! Keep it up!
Uchiha Hatori