 TylerB 2007-10-19 . chapter 1I'm squirming from the uncomfort that you were able to portray to me so strongly here. So gritty and dirty. I feel like I need to go take a shower. |
 in theory 2007-04-17 . chapter 1I'm a waterwhore too (reincarnated merman; are you Cancerian btw?)
"Half-cold bed." I like.
The last stanza is perfect, to me; it kinda tiptoes off. Sneaky. |
 Faithless Juliet 2006-11-29 . chapter 1Powerful and passionate; I just loved this, the imagery and storytelling was amazing. I applaud you. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet. |
 Noir Fleurir 2006-11-08 . chapter 1whoa *whistles* nice going on this one its very deep and thought provoking and you put some nice imagery too! good stuff here |
 no.peace.los.angeles 2006-11-06 . chapter 1Wow, intense poem. Some of the images in this are just outstanding. I love "philosopher paint cologne and thyme" and "bloodshot grey eyes." I mean, this poem really is intense. I love the last 5 lines of this, too, "and the knowledge of being alone/dirty/and alone, and sick, and alone, and/quiet, and/still." Just beautiful work, my dear. Keep writing! :) |
 caralita 2006-11-03 . chapter 1this poem is so dark in a realitstic way, so much imagery. i love it |
 a lonely september 2006-10-27 . chapter 1this is so sad. i love the way you begin it, i love all of it. the details of your first love are intruiging. so pretty... so... beautiful. i really love this poem. and its so sad towards the ending. |
 the naked civil servant 2006-10-25 . chapter 1his blurred image and smell
of philosopher paint cologne and thyme
became the icon of the forgetfulness
of love
oh... god that is surreally beautiful. love love adore. just got back from a halloween party. they are... they are crazy... just that feeling, you know. omeone else'sbed. |
 Leaving Here 2006-10-23 . chapter 1wow.i loved it.
keep writing.
Liz |