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| Alicia Marianne 2008-04-23 ch 1, anon. | abusei like it very much. has a romantic/ironic touch to it. will there be more? |
| super happy nuclear girl 2007-05-24 ch 1,  | abuse"hovered at her elbow like a recycled paper crane" Wow. What a line to fall in love with. Another for the pot. Jesus christ I am so jealous of you! |
| Asagao 2007-01-19 ch 1, | abusethere's something very chuck palahniuk about this one, but i can't place it. Stunning. |
| Ladiebug 2006-12-24 ch 1, | abuseif i can write poems at least half as interesting or as good as you do at some point in my life I'll die happy. |
| ShadesofBlue69 2006-11-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseoh hells baby, i really like this one. the imagery is great and so is the phrasing and the dialouge is so seductive. And i can relate to it, so that makes it all the better. very spectacular job darling! |
| eden is burning 2006-11-04 ch 1, | abusejesus, everything about this was beautiful, original. the ending was my favourite part, but it was all just. wow. xx |
| a lonely september 2006-10-27 ch 1, | abusei'm speechless, jesus, im speechless. i loved this. you must continue this. just find a way. because it was ** beautiful and this guy reminds me of ... a certain someone and i just need more... this is gorgeous. please. please. for me, write more. |
| lackluster 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseit's such a beautiful little puzzle. i'm left reading it over and over for some little secret word I missed. the ending, in particular, is mesmmerizing. |
| Prevaricate 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseFantastic character development in such a short piece. Reads like poetry, which I love; the details in it are amazing, with the paper cranes and lines like "she blinked at him like a butterfly's wings." Just all around great writing. |
| Aquafied 2006-10-25 ch 1, | abuseThe man beside her wiped his mouth. "He'll tear you apart." there were way too many parts to say that i loved about this |
| Aimee Raven 2006-10-25 ch 1, | abuseI've never read anything like this. Your style is so unique...the characters, maybe sometimes seeming a tad cliché are so deep and...your descriptions and the words you use are stunning. "laughed like January", "jack of all trades", "he was not a boy who took deep breaths" i could go on forever...every line is like an opening to another world, I swear. Brilliant. love, Mia |
| she's lying when her lips m... 2006-10-24 ch 1, | abuseI love that. The paper cranes reminded me of a book I read back when I was about 9 or 10, and even though it was a simple line, I loved the "Change my Life" line. I'm always so glad to see another one of your peices up. |
| Elenive 2006-10-24 ch 1, | abuseI love the reference to paper cranes. Also, Vegas is a great name. Symbolic. The conversation really stands out. The characters have this misty realism to them. |