This is a lovely hiaku. I must agree that the tense does sound a bit off at times, but the words are so descriptive that it doesn't detract that much from the poem itself. If I were you, I'd just fix that and the poem would be great!

Nicely written...although the word tenses are a little off in places. Still, I really liked this poem.

Excellent job.
Thanks for the review!
~Rowan~

This is lovely. Has a tinge of sadness, yet peace in it. The tense seems a bit weird though.

saddening...

... What?

Vivid, and the mood is well written here. I like this.

I love this, lovely simply imagery... however, I think the tenses need looking at - 'she now plundered down under/rested peacefully' it makes more sense (to me) if it was 'she now plunders down under/ resting peacefully'. In my opinion.
But anyway, I like it :D
Keep writing!