Cool! very interesting.

Hey! I thought that this short story was so awesome. You really bring out a great POV. I had never thought of some of that in that perspective. Great writing, keep it up.

Still, you are lost in the ocean of obliviousness: This sounds like someone I know (Captain Oblivious is what I call them:). I like how your writing applies to real life.

Thanks for giving your time to write!
~EllieMarlue

Oh, I really like this. The flow is wonderful and the depth of the words is unbelievable. I love the meaning, I love the format, I love the different perspectives. There is something about this that speaks to me. The depth, that has to be it. In a myriad of words you have placed am amount of depth into this that few are able to obtain. I love it.