Aww. That was really cute, and the flow wasn't too bad either.

Now, if you care to hear it, some constructive criticism:

The time line itself seems a bit rushed. I'm sure it probably wouldn't if I had been following chapter by chapter, though that's the true test isn't it? I had a couple of major issues with spelling such as, "u" instead of "you"; but grammar-wise any flaws were easily passed over. The entire story was fairly short, but intense. It would be nice to see it spread out a little more, like one centimetre of butter on your scone instead of five. Over all it was a well done, if slightly predictable, story and I enjoyed reading it very much.

Great story! I really enjoyed reading this story! I did find the ending a bit short...

Athena

I thought I'd read and review one of your stories in return for the review of mine.

I thought this was well written, and with a bit of lengthening and editing it would make an excellent story. Not to say it wasn't good already, I'm just a stickler for constructive criticism.

Ok, this the second time I've read this story and it's so good. I love it so much XD

i have to say that was a pretty adorable story , i liked it a lot great job !:D

Hello! I've actually read the whole story, but my internet is messing with my head again, and the window crashed just as I was finishing the story, so instead of risking it again, I decided just to review on the first chapter instead of the last!! YAY!!
So yeah, great story, a little cliche, and what DID happen to the father? but yeah! loving it!
Lee

Ha ha ha.

The camp bed was under his own bed.

Niicce.

Great story, by the way!

omg
do a sequel. this was amazing. loved every second of it. :D

Oh my good golly but i am completely enamoured with this story. I was from the very first chapter. granted the subject matte,r the violence was difficult to read but still it was absolutely beautiful. I loved the tension between the characters, however subtle it may have been, their affection for each other was absolutely lovely.
The only thing that I didn't like about it was that it was over in 16 chapters. how utterly cruel of you. :)
I want more. Truly, I want more. i want to know how they lived happily ever after, what they had to go through once they acknowledged their feelings for each other. i want it all.
This was just wonderful and sweet and touching and heartfelt and just perfect.
Write more!

:)

I liked the story a lot!
It had a bit difficult start, the first chapter had some very long sentence and (for me) uncommon words wich made it hard to understand. But that was only the first chapter.
The last chapter was a little confusing, but the end was brilliant!

goodstory

I finished my homework!
Aww... so sweet..haha... I'm not usually into yaoi or M/M or whatever you wanna call it! But so far this one's pretty good!

oh wow... I so want to continue reading this, but my mom's making me start on my homework! = < its not fair! I'll hurry, because I really like this story alot! Also I wanted to ask you if you would beta read some of my stories?

wow that was a great story! you had me smiling so wide by the end of the story! and the bed thing? i wish i had kyle as a bf, but with a different name... XD

yeah, im bi, not gay...

yes, i'm reviewing again right after the first one. but hey, no one not likes multiple reviews, right? Right. Anyway, i thought the conversations b/t kyle and brett were really funny; the critic in me says yes, you lost the flow in the last chapter and blah blah blah, but honestly, i really did like the story (otherwise i wouldn't have kept reading it).

see ya