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| niteravyn1990 2007-08-14 ch 4,  | abuseOMG this story rox! |
| can't post no more 2007-06-15 ch 4, | abuseonce again, i ask you to pleasae write more! I'm dying here!! WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! |
| Doktor Beppo 2007-06-13 ch 1, | abuseYou know, spell check works wonders. Try it out sometime :) |
| can't post no more 2007-06-10 ch 1, | abuseMORE! Thi9s is the most awsome story EVER! I Need MORE! On a scale of 1-10 10 as the highest, you made a 47 OK! Please PM me the second you get this! PLEASE GIVE ME MORE! |
| I am gone now. 2007-05-24 ch 5, | abuseWow! that's really good! BTW, have you ever read maximum ride? It's a book alot like what your writting, except the kids are all brid children, more like angels! Read it, you'll like it! |
| Camalot777 2007-05-15 ch 1, | abuseHey, Battlelust! I'm so sorry I left R.I.C. like that. My Internet was having problems and when it finally got back to working condition again, FP was the last thing on my mind! Anywho, Curtis Allen and myelf are enjoying ourselves in Forest of Avalon. Feel free to join us. |
| The Ferrett 2007-03-18 ch 5, | abuseAll that wait for a little tidbit, BattleLust I'm ashamed of you. (teasing voice). Anyway hope a new chap comes soon. |
| M.R.Sanner 2007-03-14 ch 4, | abuseOk u HAVE to update ,you can't just leave off their ! Seriously this is really good and reminds me of When the Wind Blows / the Lake House by James Patterson ( awsume books ) . Seriosuly update ! Confuzzld Me |
| M.R.Sanner 2007-03-14 ch 3, | abuseoh kitty ears ! I would luv to have cat ears >< These kids sound really kewl , ubt I feel so sorry for the babys that died . Poor babys . |
| M.R.Sanner 2007-03-14 ch 2, | abusewow...what a horriable guy , though at elast he feels sorry for such awful deeds . Hmm I have no clue why but it sort of reminded me of how the powerpuff girls were created > |
| M.R.Sanner 2007-03-10 ch 1, | abuseOh they sound ubber smart and well uuber everything .Hm tatto thing on their neck sorta reminds me of Dark Angel , but I still love that whole idea . Very kewl and I will be sure to read more ^ ^ Confuzzld Me |
| MaDMaS22 2007-02-21 ch 3, | abuseI kinda wish the chapters were a tad longer. just as im starting to get into your world its over you know. at one point you have thru instead of through. but thats ok. umm lets just see where this goes |
| MaDMaS22 2007-02-21 ch 2, | abuseVery loopy Chapter. I kinda wish you could break things up a little bit more but no biggie. on i go. |
| Kumquat21 2006-12-10 ch 4, | abuseInteresting! I like how you included the name of the podiatry gland, instead of just saying "Oh, they grew up faster." It was smart, and I liked how Jeremy is questioning why they're enjoying German and Latin. He's a distinctive character, good job on him! Now I have to be mean. T_T. In other words, CC: Again, elongate a little. You could describe the exact stubborn look of Keida, and perchance mention how each of the children adapt to their martail arts classes - it would increase the depth of their personalities. I'd love to find out more about them! |
| Kumquat21 2006-12-10 ch 3, | abuseAh! I'm guessing the girl with silver eyes is the one he shouted 'owl' for! My cc, again, elongate it. Or, if you don't want to do that, combine the last two chapters, inserting small transitions in between. Don't worry about it being slow, it's fairly interesting. |