Wow . . . that was really, really, tremendously good. There are a few little nitpicky grammatical errors, a missing hyphen or apostrophe here and there, but overall I thought it was excellently written. The endings of the passages were especially poignant, the running theme of sleep made for excellent unity. The ending, especially, was bloody brilliant. The concept of heaven vs. hell vs. purgatory was excellently played out. The descriptions of the torture were very . . . visceral, very real. I was definitely getting some pathos for the guy up until the fourth passage when that all got broken down by the voice. Seriously excellent.

That said, the degree to which the first three parts of this match the beginning of The Cage by Roy Brown is seriously bizarre. I'm slightly creeped out by it.

very ceepy i won't be able to sleep thanks to you!

I liked it. It went by a little slow, but it was very well written. Also, I liked the theme of sinlessness not being the same as goodness. I liked the descriptiveness of the story. I noticed that you used a lot of passive verbs like "was" and "were." I'm not innocent of this myself, but I've been told that too many of these can make a story boring or hard to read (not that yours is). But overall I really liked it. (You know I always like your stories.)

I'm leaving a comment but I'm not telling you what I think of it because at this very moment I'm talking to you on AIM so you're going to know what I think about it in three seconds.

Holy pisstizzle that was scary. Good job. Reminded me of "I Have no Mouth and I must Scream" by Harlan Ellison.

It's absolutely brilliant, and the simplicity of the demand makes it so utterly pathetic. It at first seems so realisitc, but then when you find out the guy is dead, it becomes so much more realistic. Yet at the same time, there's a lingering doubt - is the voice true? At least, that's how I say it. I absolutely loved the story. You need to write more often than once every six months.

ooh..i'm going to have nightmares for weeks!

Wow, that was really really good. I loved the way you wrote, I loved the plot, the imagery, all of it. It truly shows how you can take something small,a cage and darkness and two voices, and turn it into something vivid and exciting. It was scary on a new level. Anyway, the least I can say is I thoroughly enjoyed every second of reading.

Not much more to say that I didn't say yesterday.
I would love to see more stories like this, though. Well done.

Oh, that story sure is freaky. Good job, I love the way it was written.