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| The Ferrett 2007-01-24 ch 1,  | abuseSorry for the insensitivity but AW. I'm in a slightly odd mood so this feeling is not condusive. It's decent, but is a tad mushy to really convay a emotional link. |
| Hali 2007-01-21 ch 1, | abuseI absolutely love this poem. It's really good...I can totally relate to it. Keep writing! |
| ming yee 2006-10-29 ch 1, anon. | abusehey.. first of all , u're poems are gud .. as always.. keep up the gud work.. or in this case .. keep up the gud stories.. |
| Mea Somnium 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseThat was really well done! I enjoyed it. |
| Hannah-lou 2006-10-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseAll right... I liked it, I liked it a lot. However, there are a couple of grammar issues, and I thought that this rhyme sounded quite forced: Three words that is (should be that *are*) nothing but a truth. I love you. Three words that make me feel uncouth. Perhaps you could try and find a more fitting word? Even if it doesn't rhyme as well, it would sound more natural. Other than that, however... it was really good :) |