 Hannah-lou 2006-10-26 . chapter 1 All right... I liked it, I liked it a lot. However, there are a couple of grammar issues, and I thought that this rhyme sounded quite forced:
Three words that is (should be that *are*) nothing but a truth.
I love you.
Three words that make me feel uncouth.
Perhaps you could try and find a more fitting word? Even if it doesn't rhyme as well, it would sound more natural. Other than that, however... it was really good :) |