FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| One-Hand Clap 2008-04-19 ch 1,  | abuseGah! The rhyming scheme in this - it's perfect! And all the couplets... it's like a punch in the gut, they're so perfect. Gah! I loved it. The subject matter, as well. I know exactly what you mean. And I can relate to this, which is something hard to do with most poems. So it's amazing. Well done. - Clap Trap, from Review Marathon [link in my profile] |
| hey maria 2007-05-09 ch 1, | abuseOh, oh, me too! |
| myheartiswaypastbeating 2006-10-28 ch 1, | abuseInteresting |
| Thenardier 2006-10-28 ch 1, | abuseI loved this a lot. It flows beautifully. And the last few lines were brilliant, especially the last two. Good job! |
| Unknown Anatomy 2006-10-27 ch 1, | abuseI really like this, the whole rhyming scheme worked really well. I thought you were brutally honest and i really liked the imagery you use. |
| these calories are killing ... 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseFor this moment, let's pretend my penname is 'the irony is killing me,' because it is. And I love it. My favorite part is how it's ironic, yet fitting. Confessions of lies (okay, not exactly lies, but that’s the term I’m going use), whilst exhibiting the symptoms of your lies. It’s like one of those true/false statements, such as “I always lie and never tell the truth” where if you always lie, it’s true... and not a lie. But if you always tell the truth and the statement is false... you’re a liar. It goes in circles. This is your confession, but if it’s true than what you wrote is fiction, which means it’s a lie, which means you told the truth. Circles. |
| Manju 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abusegreat job! i can totally agree and relate with this poem. i love poetry that talks about writing in general. and this one does that exact thing except it also talks about the hidden messages and/or lessons in a written work. what u did makes writing poetry much more honorable and beautiful. |
| ten pts above average 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abusewow I love the ending... |
| sidt4gurl 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseGreat rhyme and word choice plus I can relate to it~ I love it! |