I cannot explain to you the imagery I get from this. I love how you ended it, "a crimson tide rises behind her eyes," and I like the fact that the writing is all lowercase. This reminds me of everything I love to read. May I ask what you meant by "red box"? And...I don't think I'm reading this right, but what do you mean by "throwing her body into the movement of"?

The question marks look odd outside of the quotations. Heh.