FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| fairytale failure 2006-12-19 ch 1,   | You've layed out the decision very beautifully; what especially stood out was 'A small notebook meant for dates and times over riddles and rhymes'. The images and feelings of cold are so intense I started shivering! |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-10-26 ch 1, | "icicle eyes lift from the page", is a very vivid and descriptive statement. I like how this shows the progression of the scene through the effect that cold from the external causes. Well written. You've presented a vivid portrait of the situation through the specific imagery. Excellent work. |