hey. I read a bit of your story. so far, i think it's great. The story I published has a character named Akina as well. Would you want to read it? It's in the fantasy section as well and the title's Elemental Quest: Book 1. A review would be nice. I'll see if I can finish reading your story too when I get the time.

Aw such a cute chapter. i'm looking forward to the next chapter. oh and can u make it longer, though it did end nice here in this chapter, it would be nice to read more. so, update soon.

Ja-Ne =^_^=

This story is interesting. i'm looking forward to the next chapter. please update soon.

Ja-Ne =^_^=

Just a gramatical thing to keep in mind: I see you using a lot of commas where you don't need them and leaving them out where you do. Anyway, I liked the chapter, that small thing aside (Comma Nazi, excuse me. ^ ^;). I thought it was very nice, that her feeling were very believable and the dialog flowed reasonably well.

Hey, I just read chapter 3. As always, great job. I can hardly wait for chapter 4. I remember the taco thing, its sad, but funny. I wonder how many people would believe that part is a true story.

It's quite good. I like how natural the dialog is. However, you might try to make the narration a little more formal. Though it's a first person story, if you have the parts where she was narrating as opposed to speaking a little more structure it would make it a much smoother read. Even so, it's quite enjoyable.

Really nice chapter. Just a couple of spelling and gramatical errors. And not all the words flowed as well as they could've. But, those minor things aside, I enjoyed the chapter. I'll keep a close watch on this story...

Hey. As always, great job. A few gramatical things, but you're insanly good at the creative/imagery thing. You've got such greath thoughts and you do so well at putting it all down on (paper?). Keep up the good work, I can hardly wait for the rest.

As always, you are an amazing author. Where do you come up with your story? I remember you talking about the idea to me, and the way you've written it is fantastic. I can't wait to read more of the story!

Pretty good so far. Grabbed my attention. In the second chapter you used where instead of were in the last sentence. That's the only thing I saw but if you looked at my stories I'm sure you'd find mistakes as well so like I have room to talk. XP

Look forward to reading the rest of it! ^_^

Nice chapter. The imagry is good, I can really picture it in my mind. However, I do believe there are more eloquent ways to put the sentances, maybe make the transitions smoother. There are also just a couple gramtical/spelling errors I noticed. Other than those minor flaws, brilliant.