Reviews for Destiny’s calling

Reviews For: Destiny’s calling

rmzucker 2006-12-26 ch 1,	abusehey. I read a bit of your story. so far, i think it's great. The story I published has a character named Akina as well. Would you want to read it? It's in the fantasy section as well and the title's Elemental Quest: Book 1. A review would be nice. I'll see if I can finish reading your story too when I get the time.
Sonyashinto 2006-12-07 ch 6,	abuseAw such a cute chapter. i'm looking forward to the next chapter. oh and can u make it longer, though it did end nice here in this chapter, it would be nice to read more. so, update soon. Ja-Ne =^_^=
Sonyashinto 2006-11-27 ch 5,	abuseThis story is interesting. i'm looking forward to the next chapter. please update soon. Ja-Ne =^_^=
CorruptGuardian 2006-11-18 ch 4,	abuseJust a gramatical thing to keep in mind: I see you using a lot of commas where you don't need them and leaving them out where you do. Anyway, I liked the chapter, that small thing aside (Comma Nazi, excuse me. ^ ^;). I thought it was very nice, that her feeling were very believable and the dialog flowed reasonably well.
Dave 2006-11-13 ch 3, anon.	abuseHey, I just read chapter 3. As always, great job. I can hardly wait for chapter 4. I remember the taco thing, its sad, but funny. I wonder how many people would believe that part is a true story.
CorruptGuardian 2006-11-11 ch 3,	abuseIt's quite good. I like how natural the dialog is. However, you might try to make the narration a little more formal. Though it's a first person story, if you have the parts where she was narrating as opposed to speaking a little more structure it would make it a much smoother read. Even so, it's quite enjoyable.
CorruptGuardian 2006-11-04 ch 2,	abuseReally nice chapter. Just a couple of spelling and gramatical errors. And not all the words flowed as well as they could've. But, those minor things aside, I enjoyed the chapter. I'll keep a close watch on this story...
Miller 2006-11-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey. As always, great job. A few gramatical things, but you're insanly good at the creative/imagery thing. You've got such greath thoughts and you do so well at putting it all down on (paper?). Keep up the good work, I can hardly wait for the rest.
Brian Creel 2006-11-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseAs always, you are an amazing author. Where do you come up with your story? I remember you talking about the idea to me, and the way you've written it is fantastic. I can't wait to read more of the story!
zoogarama 2006-10-31 ch 2,	abusePretty good so far. Grabbed my attention. In the second chapter you used where instead of were in the last sentence. That's the only thing I saw but if you looked at my stories I'm sure you'd find mistakes as well so like I have room to talk. XP Look forward to reading the rest of it! ^_^
CorruptGuardian 2006-10-26 ch 1,	abuseNice chapter. The imagry is good, I can really picture it in my mind. However, I do believe there are more eloquent ways to put the sentances, maybe make the transitions smoother. There are also just a couple gramtical/spelling errors I noticed. Other than those minor flaws, brilliant.

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