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KatsuTami 2008-08-08 . chapter 6
Okay seriously, you need to keep writing this. I am hopelessly addicted! I love Sugarglow lol he's so cute and I just wanna hug him. The poor thing is so sensitive... I need to know what's going on here! Please keep writing!
KatsuTami 2008-08-08 . chapter 5
Original fiction isn't hard to get in to, I read it all the time =P I like Eiko, she intrigues me... and I want to learn more about the half-spirits; where they come from, what their purpose is, how their form is chosen... I like this story =)
KatsuTami 2008-08-08 . chapter 4
I really don't know what to write in these reviews! Your prose, grammar, and spelling are all excellent, and you pull me into your story further with every chapter. I love it =)
KatsuTami 2008-08-07 . chapter 3
seriously, this thing is awesome! I love your creativity, and I just keep wanting to know more! You better get writing, I'm going to have this finished by tomorrow!
KatsuTami 2008-08-07 . chapter 2
I must say this is a really intriguing story! I love Sugarglow, with his saucer eyes and being all cute! Crying over a lost hair, that was adorable! Honestly this story has me captivated; I'm going to have to read every chapter you have up so far before I go back to ! I hope you are working on more; I would really like to see it finished!!
KatsuTami 2008-08-07 . chapter 1
This BLOWS MY MIND lol I like this story =P It seems like exactly the kind of fantasy that's right up my alley =) And I love the names!! I'm going to continue on now =)
mysisterisasquijum 2008-01-04 . chapter 6
Hey,

this is good, can't wait for the next chapter ^^

~mysisterisasquijum
Razel Trushan 2008-01-02 . chapter 6
Hello, and thank you for posting more, I quite enjoyed it and want the next chapter allready. :D hope you had a happy new years and a merry chirstmas as well.
Zero Serenity 2007-12-18 . chapter 6
ooh what's gonna happen at the castle... dun dun dun. lol yeah it was as good as everything you write, i offer you my full support... GO SAPPHIREFLY!!
mysisterisasquijum 2007-12-09 . chapter 1
hey,

nice start, looking forward to reading the rest.

~mysisterisasquijum
jomiel 2007-11-28 . chapter 1
Exciting first chapter (but then which ch you've wrote isn't exciting?). That was a quick draw into Tesai's personality and powers, introduction to the world of demons and minions, and a demon fight! I'm always amazed at your completely natural and dynamic dialogue.

What to critique? There are a few instances where sentences should be switched around to create more logical continuity. Some spelling and grammar missed, and the usual "less is more" in phrasing. Your storytelling is powerful and pushes past these blips, and particularly the sentence switches may not be readily apparent to other readers.

As always, an enjoyable read, and a promising start. You know my opinion on editing; if you'd like me to perform as an editor, I'm always happy to do so.
jake 2007-11-23 . chapter 1
Well, Im not qualified to give a review, but i read through ur story, and i must say, it was a bit difficult for me to get the right context, maybe cause im not too well informed about demons or what.
your style is really nice, and it did keep me till the end.
cheers
jake
poptart 2007-11-11 . chapter 5
not bad i cant wait to see what happens next
Zero Serenity 2007-11-03 . chapter 5
it was awesome, this chapter and 4, but who is she, is she the evil twin, or is celesia, or... is it a split personality?? I GOTTA KNOW! >
Razel Trushan 2007-10-30 . chapter 5
Well, I guess I have to admit that if you keep puting them out at this rate I shall have no problems with the chapters being shorter.

Good job and I can't wait untill I can read more.
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