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   Abbytjie 7/31/12 . chapter 25I love the imagery of chapter 3, comparing your life to a garden. Really beautiful. Chapter nine's author's note was really sweet and made me smile. I like how you compared the effects of caffeine to the effects of love in chapter 13. I think the author's note in chapter 17 is grammatically incorrect, but I can't elaborate since I'm not sure how, I just know it looks wrong. Chapter 19 is really sweet and full of unspoken meanings. Chapter 23 gave me goosebumps, definitely my favourite. |
| artofjula 7/24/10 . chapter 4 LOL I tried reviewing this at first but it said I had to wait 15 seconds! Wow.. This one was really good. I can definitely empathize. |
| artofjula 7/24/10 . chapter 3 I like how your author's notes correspond with the actual piece. Good job so far! I'm loving it.. |
| artofjula 7/24/10 . chapter 2 Aww. These are so sad. :( |
| artofjula 7/24/10 . chapter 1 I like how you didn't capitalize anything. It really added something that made me like it even more! |
| Brenda Agaro 3/5/10 . chapter 23 I especially like this one. To me, it was clever and relatable, and the like the use of "flesh." |
| nickyO 1/31/10 . chapter 23 icky but effective |
| sealednectar 1/31/10 . chapter 23 This is my most favourite one. 'Putrefy' is such a great word. I like the grotesque image of 'putrefying flesh'. The reader wonders what has caused this 'love' to be 'dead' to begin with. Another word you could have used is 'stinks' instead of 'smells' but perhaps that would have reduced from the horror of the last two words. Good use of the senses of smell and sight. Shocking, striking and memorable. Excellent. |
| sealednectar 1/31/10 . chapter 19 This one had me giggling. Lovers who know each other very well, it's sweet. |
| sealednectar 1/31/10 . chapter 18 Woah! I've felt like this so often. Kudos for putting that despairing feeling into words. And a great image to boot. |
| sealednectar 1/31/10 . chapter 17 A sad one. You're really great at these though. Also, I love the word 'inimical'. |
| sealednectar 1/31/10 . chapter 13 I loved this simile! Well done. Also, your a/ns add a lot to each haiku, another layer of meaning. |
| sealednectar 1/31/10 . chapter 2 Ah, this is so sad. Strong image. I wonder if the other person will ever turn up. Good haiku. |
| Isca 1/30/10 . chapter 23 "Putrefying flesh." Sheesh. The 'f' alliteration here is very striking. This final line definitely connects wonderfully to the first one. |
| Isca 1/30/10 . chapter 22 "I gave you Diana's gift." Excellent allusion. the 'gift' reminded me of a forest or the moon. The tone of this haiku is very 'tender.' ;) |
