i was just browsing through your works when i saw mercury. :P i was intrigued by the summary-thingamajigy. xP thank God, i clicked the link. :P

“You never saw me;
You only saw through me.”

grhh. i lurrve you && your poems. :)

brutally beautiful. you combine so many emotions and flickering images into each verse, and all of your ideas are marvelously connected. favorite! cheers.

I could not begin to tell the story of why this piece appeals to me "like poisonous snowflakes, dangerous..." I HAVE tried in my work to put it into words, but to no avail. Even the millions that we have in English, put together with ALL the other languages in the world, would never be enough to add up to what was felt in my past experience that culminated in me feeling just as this poem describes. "She feels someone staring at the curve of her back, but because she can look only ahead, she refuses to turn around." This is the hardest part. There is nowhere to move EXCEPT forward, and yet as you say, "frozen in place" unable to either go ahead or turn back. It's such a horrible place to be really. The last three lines are heartwrenching. "She can never measure up to you..." ah, yes, so, so true in my instance. I always felt he was better than me in certain areas of life, in the most important ones in fact, for I'm sure he HAS been able to stick to his resolve and move on. But I am left "in the middle of frozen deserts," 'claiming I've given him up," but my teeth still spill the secret in my "work" and in my reviews such as this. -sigh- My only solace is that he does not visit this community any longer... so at length, through pieces such as this and others, as well as a great deal of leaning on God and friends, I will eventually begin "to make some progress."

Thanks for writing this, and for reading the lengthy, and very self-serving, review. I don't know about you, but I always appreciate it when something I've written touches someone so profoundly. I just thought you should know that this did that for me... Truly, Tourterelle (a pensive day)

Very nice poem. This is elegant and mature - I get the sense that this is a very adult problem, and something that can be written about only from experience. A few favorite bits: "She always thought that pain could be measured in degrees." The double meaning there is wonderful. And can't pain be measured in degrees? Interesting concept. "Still she feels someone staring at the curve of her back, but because she can look only ahead, she refuses to turn around." Oh, that is just nice. Once again, the double meaning of that - how she's refusing to look back on what once was, and instead choosing to look forward. "So she just holds the thermometer in her hands and watches the mercury fall." A fantastic closing image. Very nicely done. Keep writing! :)

"Like poisonous snowflakes,
Dangerous but purely appealing"

^Those are my favorite lines... just wow... the whole thing is absolutely beautiful...

That was stunning, I loved every word.

Well done.

WOW!
i loved it! the idea of 'mercury' - beautiful.
'frivolity is pouring out'
'she loses sense in feet, in inches'
'sge watches the mercury fall'
'she always thought that pain
could be measured in degrees'
*my favourite lines* - beautiful imagery.
i can't explain how much i liked this, but rest assured, that i am adding it to my favourites.
well done.

Positively gorgeous. Honestly, that was great!

I love how this piece progresses, it flows through naturally. Gorgeous imagery, very beautiful. My favourite is the fourth stanza, I could relate to the feeling conveyed in that one. Great piece :D

such bitterness & frigidity. i love this. the ending was perfect for this piece.

I'm definately adding this to my favorites. The imagry and metaphors here are amazing, and it was all so well written. I especially loved the lines, "Her teeth will spill the secret
Of your frigid temperatures,". This is beautifully vivid. Great work and definatley keep writing.

Beautiful imagery. It has a totally real feeling to it, like the story is actually happening, and it's so possible to feel.
I really liked it.