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| a Cornucopia of Love 2006-10-26 ch 1,   | Woah, that was a cool freaking poem! I loved the way it all flowed, and then the last line was great! ^-^ My only constructive crit is towards the lines "Dirt and grim and dreary...dusty dingy". I don't know... It sort of loses the flow that was apparent in the lines above. Or maybe that was just me. xD Still, I like it! :D |