I'm not so sure that it is within Miranda's character to lash out to kill so suddenly. I understand what happened, and the emotions tied with it, but I doubt that her total action is legitimate. I feel that the majority of this chapter was exaggerated for drama and it lost some of it's realism. I could understand her wishing she could do what she wanted, but going the extra step was maybe one step too far.
Other than that, it's the same old stuff. I've never told anyone they describe too much, but sometimes I feel like just skimming the paragraph instead of actually reading it because you tend to restate things three times only with different words before moving on to the next thing. It's very heavy, which, I suppose, could be intended since it is a rather heavy story.
But the story is good, and there are a lot of points that you need to make and the characters are very full so it's definitely worth reading and I look forward to the next chapter.

Summer school is time-consuming so it took until today for me to be able to read your last update. I'm really glad Nathaniel is beginning to open up more to Miranda, I feel that she deserves it. It's a bummer about the end of the chapter, but that was necessary as well since I didn't think there was any point to them being there.

Cool, an update. It's been a while. This chapter was okay, it had a lot of typing errors, but those are forgivable since it's been so long since the last chapter update. I liked it in general. I think you describe too much, which is strange to say because I've never met anyone else that could do such a thing. I think it would be a better story if you backed off a little bit and let it tell itself. The story is still awesome though, and I'll be waiting for your next update :)

found it of IMDB and all I start with, simpily amazing. had to read all 10 chapters in one shot. got to the last one and felt like miranda after nathaniel left the first time. loss of hope for being with the story and having an ending. rough draft material in some areas as was stated in other reviews. but the descriptions were vivid enough to made me feel like I was there. and the character comments made me feel like I could compare them to someone I know. it's a shame that if it was made into a movie that most of the narative would be lost. the feelings of Miranda would be hard to show in a movie. please finish it. very cool in bring several scifi-ish styles together. ghosts, time travel and unique gifts.

Doc

Oh, man! That was such a cliff-hanger! Awesome chapter, though. It was really nice. You had mentioned before that you were incorporating a lot of New Age stuff, and I see how that is tied in. It makes me wonder how deeply you are into the whole New Age thing. I know a lot of people who are completely immersed in it, which can be very interesting at times. All that stuff can definitely make a story unique and interesting, like yours.

as you can guess i have attention span issues, which is why i can't not review every chapter, but i'll try my best. Hmm mm. skipped over the beginning few paragraphs, kinda boring, stuff about Josh and the girl pretty predictable, conclusion outright predictable (obviously she"ll jump off something cos she thinks hes disgusting) and hmm m..suspense is dispelled because we can already guess what this 'familiar' indigo means, another surprise from the guy 'Nathanial'...(Im guessing, but it seems too obvious at this point). Again not trying to flame or anything, just thought this could somehow turn out beter. yhou'll excuse me for not reading on, however. I think my brain will explode if I strain it to read a bunch of more paragraphs, no offense.
-Entreri

I'm not that into Romance stories, but from the little that I've read of this story, I can tell it's a good one. I'm favoriting you.

Well..interesting series of events. Never thought of writing a story about kmart..heh. Well, seems believable enough at the beginning, and perhaps a bit unusual towards the end. Perhaps something to look forward to, and a rather ingenious idea. What I don't get is why he's interested in her one second and sends her back the next so abruptly, but maybe you meant that to happen. We shall see.
-Entreri

Not so much seemed to get answered, I guess that more questions were posed in this one. The auras reminded me of those people into Meridians and Energy Fields and stuff like that. Do you know anything of those things? I think it would probably be interesting to see how those sorts of things would tie into this story, or not. Anyway, I need to get to work.

Please, please, please fix the chapter. It downloaded mostly as one large paragraph. Oh, the torture of reading a paragraph that long, that couldn't have been you but a malfunction of the computer. Aside from the technicality, it was a good chapter, it seemed a bit heavy, but now that we can get more answers, that's good. I'm also glad that their relationship was restored. Nathaniel seems to me to be a decent fellow now, at least he seems to wish for the best.

WOW. I'm sorry, I only have time to read the first chapter but I shall try and read the others! That was so brilliantly written! Full of deatil but it still flowed and I really felt I could emphasise with Miranda. I'm not sure what's going to happen next but I'm really intrigued!

Good job!

"The tone of the voice sounded completely as if the person were talking with a clogged naval cavity." It's amazing what one little letter will do to change a sentence :) it made me laugh.
This chapter was so intense! I'm busy so I can't write more. Awesome work! Update soon, capisce?

Okay, fine, Kara might not be evil after all :) But you never know!

I think your writing would be a lot better if the characters had different voices. You have a nice, strong voice, and it never falters in your story. But all the characters sound the same, with the same voice. Do you see?

It's all awesome though. Very awesome.

Yay! I love answers :) Awesome chapter. It's coming along. I'm glad you developed more of the plot here. Excellent. It was an interesting chapter, the answers weren't at all what I was expecting. Sweet action.

Hm, this was an interesting chapter. I think Kara's evil, but I'll have to keep reading to find out if she really is or not...
And, I guess the other thing that kind of stands out to me is that you write the shallow, mindless people literally as shallow, mindless people as opposed to the realistic view of the shallow, mindless people thinking that they aren't shallow, and having a mindless personality. I don't see very much personality within the mindless peers, which, obviously, could be meant for, but it's not entirely realistic. Some people like some shallow things, while other mindless people like the other shallow things :P But the characters in the story that Miranda engages with do the tiniest thing that is shallow, and then Miranda fills in the rest with thought, which makes the shallow character seem less real because Miranda is limiting the ability of their mindlessness and preventing them from truly expressing how mindless they really are.

If that made any sort of sense... that would be kind of nice... but it's just a thought, don't mind it :) Awesome work! I'll read more later.

~AnnA~