This story is hauntingly scary that I totally love it.

Nicole, you are so scarily lovely xD

Sofia xoxo

Are you Ashley? Because Charmaine, Eric, Hawaii, barely 5 ft, long hair, shy, teacher's pet.. reminds me of something. *suspicious* Too much coincedence..

Wow! I love this story! It's a really beautiful piece of literature.

It's not a bad concept, the only problem's are the flow (it's slightly confusing from time to time) and the constant use of 'and'; 'and then this... and she... and so he... and then...'
Then again, like you said - 1 a.m. so I guess I shouldn't be complaining lol. The one thing I do like about it that seems to be a constant in your works is that you never really describe anything in detail - when a character's angry, it's just written as 'she was really angry'. It gives a certain distance to your characters but the sense of anxiety and insanity is much better implied this way.

Nice work.

Wow, it was great and chilling. The effects and the spooky feeling you got from her father was amazing. You had some sentences with runon, but I guess that is ok, since you wrote this at very late. Good job~ ^^

That was creepy. And you are evil, btw. :)

I don't suppose this was inspired by Browning's "Porphyria's Lover" by any chance?

Just wondering. Similar theme and whatnot.