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| green.gaze 2007-01-24 ch 1,   | Once again you treat us with a wonderful short story. The descriptions are excellent, it is so easy to viualise every single scene in your mind. I love the parralel situations between the two characters. I like also how you don't try to go too deep into the caracters. Just simple informations on how they feel at the moment. The relationships with their boss. Their dreams... The ending is just perfect, the line fits perfectly. Once again you show us you truely master that style. I can't wait for an other one shot from you. |
| coffee and debussy 2007-01-19 ch 1, | I adored this story. It was very well written and very cute. dancesandsways did a great job, with just enough detail that it wasn't over-powering, but wasn't missing anything. 10/10 =] |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-12-01 ch 1, | Very well-written. :D Why don't you turn this into a chapter story? I bet it'd make a good amount of reviews. Well written. Yay for third person! |
| sinful.x.rapture 2006-10-31 ch 1, | Well, firstly I’d like to say that it was a really good story! I can so relate to the girl, especially when my days go oh so wrong! May I just say something, though? Well, what bugged me a little was the time! I know, I know, bugger off, but when writing a story you’re suppose to spell everything out, including numbers. I also found a few typo while reading, I’ll point it out just incase you want to edit it, if not just ignore me. “She closed to door behind her and locked it firmly” Shouldn’t that be the door? |
| cupAjoe04 2006-10-29 ch 1, | I love the concept of this and how everything and everyone comes together at the end. It's amazing and I love the description of everything in this. You're a very talented writer. |
| thelovinspoonful 2006-10-28 ch 1, | Lovely. =D I like how relateable the characters are. It's real all the way through. I mean, we all wait for prince charming to come dashing in on a gallant steed to save us, but you've made it work properly and seem pretty real all at the same time. Props to you, chicka. I like how you used the song in there a little too, but not enough to be annoying. |
| a bitter kiss. 2006-10-27 ch 1, | YAY!! Something from you! :D But I don't have to say it over again, that I loved this. I could relate to her grumpy mornings... and I just couldn't help but chuckle when I read the part she grabbed the wrong shoe, and their heels were different heights! Haha! :D I loved this piece, because yeah, in some ways I could relate. How everyday just seems to be the same, and boring, and how I just hate waking up in the morning. Haha! I liked how you wrote the two working late at night, I could really picture it in my mind. Good job. I also liked the way you ended it. Brief, but sweet. :) |
| Ri 2006-10-27 ch 1, | Nice! Lolz, would be great to see this turned into a multi-chaptered story but if not, it's still good. :) |
| hunnybee4 2006-10-27 ch 1, | i liked it keep going!! |
| cherryflavoredgrape 2006-10-27 ch 1, | Oh! I really like this! Sounds like my life, but except going to work, I go to school! same difference! I absolutely love this story! |
| KG Jonta 2006-10-27 ch 1, | This is a cute story. Very romantic. |