Reborn As I
2006-10-27
ch 1,   | the poem's great, the ending is great, but there is this one thing that annoys the hell out of me. this one line... "And up all the artwork i'll wrap." no no no no NO. makes me wanna break down your wall and beat you with some of the bricks... but the ending made up for it. it the poem wrapped nicely up. do ya see how annoying that is now? heh heh. hey, i don't really have any better suggestions for you, but how bout "and all the artwork, up i'll wrap"? i still think it sounds stupid, but not as stupid. but again, apart from that one line, the poems alright. |
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