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| Aku no Otaku 2007-01-07 ch 1, | abuseits cool :) |
| Allerleirauh 2006-12-13 ch 1, | abuseWow. Just, wow. |
| Moon-Chaser 2006-12-03 ch 1, | abuseWhen I read this it gave me goosebumps. Very powerful lines. Very powerful words and I just love it. Keep it up. |
| dog-eared hanyou 2006-11-07 ch 1, | abuseOoh, I read this exactly when a creepy song from a game popped up on my playlist. Yay for good timing. Like the song, this was creepy to read. Awesome descriptions and imagery. I'm sure it's easy for you to get an 800 on the reading section of SATs... |
| ViciousMan 2006-10-31 ch 1, | abuseThis sounds exactly like Dangerous Liasons (a film based on a French book). I like how the relationship with unfaithful/indifferent spoused is portrayed here; the victim wants to love his beloved, but he also wants to punish her for her crimes... |
| simpleplan13 2006-10-30 ch 1, | abuseim not a big fan of the extremely long lines at the end, but other than that I like it.. the first stanza especially that was so unexpected and powerful |
| KonekOniko 2006-10-29 ch 1, | abuseIt's about time! Anyways, yes, you were right, I do like this piece. Now, I don't need to tell you that this poem has a different quality or blah blah blah compared to your other pieces because you know that, I know that, and other people will tell you that anyways. What I SHOULD tell you is that you should keep writing pieces like this because the imagery/metaphors WORK. Hehe. Until next time! |
| Ice and Snow 2006-10-29 ch 1, | abusei love it! it's so angsty. it's awesome. (i'm a true angst **...lol) it's very interesting and flows quite well. all i can say is... hawt hawt hawt! x] (romance + angst = my favorite) |
| poetic abortion 2006-10-29 ch 1, | abuse"I want you. I want to seize you - by the arms, hold you closely. Then shatter you - like glass, and speak of my anguish." - That first stanza was pure gold; it was desperate and romantic-in the crazy way of love-and just stunning. I love it. Oh; there were so many lines that hurt like unrequited love and others that hurt because it was the foul-tipped, angry-raw type of love that hurts and destroies and, uh, hurts. It's beautiful and strong and, yes, it IS your best work and I am so tempted to ship it onto my favorites. Actually, scratch that, I will. That first stanza was just TOO amazing and, damn, why can't I write a good first stanza like that? Seriously. "After all this, I hunger for your flesh, your lips, and your kiss. I want to violate you, scar you - and make you mine" - Jesus, it really IS twisted and edging on that really creepy kind of love and I just can't stop reading it. The whole thing is like a love-hate thin. It's savage and viciouse and brutal, it ISN'T a loving relationship, it ISN'T a beautiful and loving thing but it is real; I love it. (And you should know, I have those strange kinks when it comes to poetry? ;D) Lovely, lovely, lovely and, uh, yeah. I WILL BE YOUR ETERNAL SLAVE OF MUSEY-NESS IF YOU KEEP MAKING POETRY LIKE THIS, IT IS JUST SO BEAUTIFUL AND AMAZING AND makes me abuse the capslock button! :O Keep it up, my friend; keep writing these wonderful and beutiful poems that tug at the heart strings like you are tyring to kill me. Yes; write more and make more beautiful poetry like this. Now. I demand it. [Wanna collab. Again?] - Noelle |
| Purified Angel 2006-10-28 ch 1, | abuseAww...that's so cute :3. Do you really feel that way about a girl o.o? Nice poem overall :3...really cute |
| myheartiswaypastbeating 2006-10-28 ch 1, | abuseLove the imagery in this. |
| Guardrail 2006-10-28 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful metaphors and imagry here. I love the violent emotion that is in this piece. Interesting religious references too. I like this a lot, keep writing. |
| lackluster 2006-10-28 ch 1, | abusegod. the first stanza is probably my favorite. it speaks for the whole poem in my opinion. it feels like a love-hate relationship and those are always the best. so interesting... |