I have just completed this story and overall, it's a great story, but you might want to go back through it and edit it again. More than once in more than one chapter, you got names confused, some of wich weren't even in the story. Still though, a good read.

Good story, nice characters. Only complaint is the continuity error in this chapter - how would Ashley's (still unnamed) foster mother know that Ashley killed Murphy? As far the police and parents know Ashley got away and later on the car crashed. Ashley killing him isn't something they know.

I'm not sure what I think of this ending. It all seems a little anti-climactic to me...

Spawny

Er... is it the end of the chapter thingy or is it the end of the series? If it's the latter one, wow.. that was kinda un- expected...

dont we get an epilogue?

this story was great. keep up the good work and writing. i wish that there was more.

Wow, I love your story. So tense and exciting. Keep it up!

this story is great. i hope it is not over. keep up the good work and writing.

imma go ahead and agree with paul. Shes bitter.

Curioser and curioser, as someone once said...

Tis a very strange tale, and one that I may be too sober right now to truly appreciate!

Spawny

haha this one seems alot more in sequence with the story

this was kinda random...

ahh man! I wanna keep reading but you need to post for that to happen. Cmon now, dont make me beg .

Interesting developments. It's a bit choppy in places, but apart from that it's okay.

Spawny

Hm...

Very interesting update, if more than a little strange!

Spawny