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| Midnight In Eden 2006-10-28 ch 1,  | abuseit is a bit cryptic but the language is good, it flows with good rhythm but you're falling back on overdone phrases. "everything i could never say", the image of building a wall. whilst i don't know the story behind it, perhaps look into your language and the way you're conveying your story. look at what makes your situation unique and use those thoughts to create a piece that uses original language to show this unique nature. .:midnight:. |