What a great read! I'm very anxious to read more. The stream-of-consciousness narrativec can be quite confusing, but as I'm deriving enjoyment, you won't find me with many complaints. Good luck with the next bit!

I really like this story. Even if at some points it does get confusing, that just makes it even better! It shows how jumpy his mind is when he's writing, or, retelling this. At least, I assume he's retelling it.

All the characters are wonderful, and I like how they have progressed. Denis, Caspar, Penny, Pen, everyone. And then the style it's written in is great. All coming out of his head, showing his distraction. Even if it doesn't explain everything, you get the gist of the story and learn to appreciate what you get.

Very nice story. :]

wow...you're an awesome writer. I never read a story like that before. I just love about everything in it. Everyone, too. Denis, Caspar, Penny, and all those others. I like the writing style you use for thia story. you're a mster when it comes to first person POV. I'm usually not a fan of that, but you just changed my mind.

Ew. Is the old lady really dead? If so; EW! SICK!

So Caspar is an apt name, and he's one HOT GUY. I love your descriptions of him ^^. So adorable!

Haha! I see why he doens't want to watch films with them...

And I'm sorry this review took an unnaturally long time to post, but I suddenly checked the clock and saw the time was half 5 and I thought Aha! I am awake! And the time is half 5! By this logic it must be breakfast time! And so I had breakfast and tried not to wake up anyone else and it was yumtacular. Because food always is ^^. BUT BACK TO YOUR REVIEW!

SO THE OLD WOMAN ISN'T DEAD BUT SHE LIVES IN A STINKY HOUSE? I think I would've preferred her to be dead :-).

That was so...UNEXPECTED. It was like 'yeah look! An old lady's house! Let's go in there *devours food*, well that was fun! Thanks sweetie!' 'No problem, now fuck off.'

I've not even smelt Caspar, seeing as he's fictional and all, but I like his smell. IS THAT WEIRD??

" That girl has devoted her life to sex and fighting. Wish I had that much energy."- xD! Hehehe...

Aw, that was sweet in a totally confusing and barely followable way. NOT THAT I'M DISSING YOUR WRITING, but, well, yeah, I was, BECAUSE I FELT LIKE PISSING YOU OFF!

Naw! Only kidding, I loved this story; it was a little, uh, jumpy at times. I would say stream of consciousness, but I always associate that with stories told from little children's points of view, and I'm quite sure you said at the top of some chapter or other that this wasn't a SOC story. So OH WELL.

But it was ace, yeah. AND NOW FOR THE GENERIC, UBERFUCKINGANNOYING PARTING LINE: Update soon! ^^.

Ew! WTF!? A fight?? With knives?? WHERE DID THIS COME FROM??

Ghost...sitting on bed...fight? Ok, where the fuck am I!?

I swear I'll never understand this story...but it's good! I like the ghost guy. HE'S HOT.

"I grabbed his cold hand and clasped it about my sex."- Oh aye? *Raises eyebrows* What's goin' on 'ere then eh?

"“I'm hungry!!” Bang, bang, bang.

“There, there,” Penny pats my head lightly, “Let's talk about sex instead. It'll help you forget until the queue is gone.”"- XD!

Haha! I like his random train of thought...

"She once grabbed and turned a guy's nuts, and then kicked him because he made a pass at her girlfriend. She also once seduced a guy and bit the tip of his penis off and spit it in his face because she'd heard that he'd said her girlfriend is a whore. She very much loves her girlfriend."- Ok...so that is frankly terrifying...

AH! Now I slightly understand the plot a bit more, YOU CONFUSED ME FOR A WHILE, YOU DEVILISH MINX!

"I had to help him jerk me off because his fingers were so cold and clammy that he couldn't move his hand properly."- OMG! EMBARRASSING OR WHAT??

Gah! This story is so confusing at times! BUT I'M GOING TO REVIEW THE NEXT CHAPTER ANYWAY BECAUSE I WANT YOU TO SUFFER UNDER MY SHITTY REVIEWS! BWAH! And one day...ONE DAY I'll review you in Swedish, in the vague hope that the translator gets it horribly wrong and I end up calling you a retarded chipmunk or something. BUT YEAH, onto the next chapter...

Other than the fact that this story moves at like A ZILLION MILES AN HOUR, I've got no complaints ^^.

HAHAHAHA! "Now, take the pretty thing out, there you go. Twinkle, twinkle, little star...and the window falls down."- that made me giggle xD, JUST A TINY BIT. But seriously...OW!

And just as a random note, I'M SORRY IT'S TAKEN ME YONKS TO REVIEW but I was writing a story and then there were a bazillion people I owed reviews to and yadda yadda yadda, but ON WITH YOUR REVIEWS! It's not like I stayed up until ten to 5 to write this *cough*.

OH MY! GRINDING ON THE COUCH?? M! YES PLEASE! I'm not even going to pretend that I don't like the sexy bits of your stories, BECAUSE I DO!

"He's horny; frozen and horny" Oh yes, BRING IT!

Oh...HE FELL ASLEEP. Well, that was bathotic...

"I stared at my bloodshot eyes in the mirror and thought to myself that I look like the dude from Hellraiser. Cool."- xD...weird-ass kid.

"I felt like waking him up by shoving my face into his and screaming “BOO!”, but I didn't have a clear history of his family's heart conditions, unfortunately."...I UNDERSTAND WHY THIS IS UNDER 'humour' NOW! xD!

"I jumped out of his way and let him fall off the bed, predicting that it would make him clear in the head.

It made him fall asleep again"- XDXDXD! hahaha! He scored GOOD!

OO! KNEW HIS SECRET? WHAT is this I wonder?? 'Read on' you say? Why of course...it's not gone 5 or anything...

so yeah your story is def amazing and i realyy realy think that you should update soon even though it shows that you havent in a long time. :/ but i hope that you do soon cuz i like it alot and you write the short little sexual scenes between them good hehe :]

Whouo. Nu kommer jag låta jätte töntig, men gah. Så, så...jag vet inte. Jag vill också skriva om galna pojkar som tänker på catwoman och inte har blöjor. Nu kommer det töntiga, insperation! Så mycket insperation det här gav mig! Du berättar mer i tre kapitel en vad andra gör i fytio.

I was wondering when you're going to update.

I like it, I like it a lot, but there are some parts that are confusing. Sometimes things seem to pop out of nowhere, like that fight scene.
Finally, someone who has a character face the "gay" thing. I've read millions of stories where they act like it's perfectly fine-no one cares sort of thing. Of course kids won't call you 'fag' behind your back.
Good luck on chapter four!

this story is like...well, i haven't ever read anything like it before, and it's really interesting. the writing's good, and so is the character development. i really like it^^ please update soon!
~kon

yay! more please

=D Yes, more kissing *smooch*
Cheers m'dear, lovely as usual.
xx

XD

*droolz*

Nicely done m'dear, your particular mix of insanity and lust always turns me on XD

love from ur addicted fan
x

This is ghastly and utterly amazing.
I sat here and just read it, like there was no tomorrow.
My mother had come into my room and told me to the Oreos away and I ignored her, LITERALLY ignored her and finished reading this.

I couldn't find anything wrong with this story at all! Your betas are very good, I see in punctuality and grammar. I need one come to think of it.

=]