I really like your story. I just can't help but worry that he's just playing her for kicks! But I think you're doing a good job. I don't read much first person, so I don't really know what to critique. Just keep writing!

I like it!!

I love it. I did wish there was more to it but but as long as you keep posting I'll keep reading.

And the Beginning, wasn't as bad as you put it to be.

(: THIS STORY IS AMAZING !! Please keep writing and keep up the AMAZING work. if you have time, can you please read and review my story? I'm new to fictionpress and would love feedback from an amazing writer like yourself.

Thanks, and keep writing =)