Note: I am writing this story as i read.

I think you should have put it into chapters, I like the beginning but after I started it, it put me off a bit to see how long it was.

I found it slightly confusing but that is possibly becuase I do not much like long poems,- although that is just an opionion - I do however like how you have short stories, the dreams, inside the poem, seemingly to give a break from the length.

I like the diction of the dialogue gives it a nice "change of pace".

In conclusion I enjoyed it very much and will read the rest of your works at another time.
~Tyer