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| caralita 2007-02-23 ch 1,  | abusehah and i like this one too, wow, that first line really caught me |
| MarvellousMarvin 2007-02-14 ch 1, | abuseha but this i do like! especially the first few lines! |
| She-Loves-Someone 2006-12-25 ch 1, | abuseAw. I really like this. A lot. (Sorry for the "aw".) |
| dimethylmercury 2006-12-15 ch 1, | abusePretty poem..good imagery... I read a poem here that was sorta like this...in a way.. |
| All Alone With Her Thoughts 2006-12-10 ch 1, | abuseI really like this piece. Excellent job. Thanks for the review! Rowan. |
| Alyssa's Attic 2006-12-02 ch 1, | abuseI loved this especially these lines: 'the fond awkwardness in that first hold-breath kiss' Well done - Alyssa |
| lastchance02 2006-11-05 ch 1, | abusei like this a lot. it's seriously lovely. great job. |
| lackluster 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abusei don't know why i read this. spontaneous. anyways, i love how you use imagery. it's enigmatic and preciously beautiful. |
| J. Kim 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abuseI like the analogy of champagne in a paper cup world =) |
| loves2flirt816 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abuseWow .. this is a really nice poem. I like it a lot! I especially like the "in an alien tongue/she's a beautiful word" that line really caught my attention. Very nice :-) Keep writing i look forward to reading more by you. (Leave me some reviews?) |
| blurred-reality 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abusethe last two lines...awesome. has a kinda sad feel to it... |
| FutureActress 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abusebrilliant! I looved this! I love your word choice always, it's simply amazing, you're extremly tallented, never give up writting, you can tell you love it!. -Kat |
| Midnight In Eden 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abuseits good. i like what you're doing here. perhaps look at different adjectives? or finding a better noun to convey what the adjective+noun is trying to do. perfect, beautiful, expensive (in fact all of your adjectives bar alien) all overused. is an awesome help with that. it flows wonderfully by the way. .:midnight:. |
| C.J. Mahan 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is hypocritical by nature and lovely to the eyes and ears. Hypocritical, because it's clear that you can write a poem that live up to this woman's standards, or should I say, a poem that is the equivilent to her beauty and perfection. |