Wow. So much anger, screaming, and drama. AND they split? Buddy, I wonder what will happen next.
BTW, you switched from past to present tense in this chapter...twice I think. Just wanted to let you know.
Glad to finally read something of yours again. ^^

AW! So cute! Whle reading this chapter, I feel like your style has changed a bit. It's more shojo anime-ish. But regardless, I loved it! The whole time I was reading it, my eyes were watering slightly. I'm not sure if it's the monitor, my allergies, or the mood of the chapter. Keep it going!

Now I must be going for I am so far behind in my accounting! Short attention spans are not good with numbers!

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I'm liking this story so far. But I had to open the review window while I read so I can remember all of your errors (sorry! But they bug me!) You remember the "blood gurggling" meets "blood curddling" issue we discussed? Well, I found another something like that. The phrase isn't "little own." It's "let alone." Innocent mistake I guess. But you confused me so bad with that. You confused me even more when "Rai kneed him in the groan." Groan? That's a sound people make when they're annoyed or in pain, maybe. The croutch area is spelled groin. Sorry. Fortunately that was about it.
Yeah, this story is really good so far. Good thing I know your style of writing so well, or I would've started getting all emotional at certain spots.
I'm looking forward to future chapters, of course!

It's a grueling process changing the format isn't it?
Anyway, I'm going to watch this story very closely, so beware!
I look forward to reading this stry and seeing what happens next as well as all your others.