My god, this is fantastic! Are you, like, a professional! You are so totally gonna be famous one day. ;-)

Seriously, I really like this. I miss your writing.

Awh. Cute.

Repetitive, but all songs are.

I'd love to hear it.

i wish i could here the music! but it's so good you can almost hear it in your mind! :D

I like the repition and the rhyming.. too bad we cant hear the music... nicely done

this is amazing beyond words... beautiful work.

It was very good. The only problem, I thought, was that you rhymed tear with clear. That latter of those lines sounds forced. The chorus is sort of weak. I thought some of the other stanzas were better, but well done, nonetheless. Keep it up.

Very nice. You have some good lines. I wish I could hear the music, it tends to add to the overall feel of the lyrics.

ooh i like this-i wish i could hear the music you have in mind-itd be funny to see if its the same _

-pamm-x3

This was really cool. I wish I could actually hear the song. :) Great job!

SF