I liked this. It was really a simple idea, but the details and thoughts made it really sweet. I liked it! ^^

You definitely counter a majority of the flaws in romance prose. Sometimes the descriptions become too extreme and the words become less structural and more just to sound sophisticated, and while you almost started to do that, the prose picked up quickly. This is a really good bit of fiction; you speak of romance but make it seem less fantastic and more real. It's definitely great, and despite a few bits of quote-on-quote "over the top" descriptions early on, it's a great look at simple romance. All in all, excellent job.

aw this is sweet. it kind of reminds me of being with my brother.