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| simpleplan13 2006-11-29 ch 1,  | abusethis is so sad.. it almost made me cry.. i especially love hte first stanza and the whole memories thing... great write |
| Crivanea 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abusethis is the best poem i read in fictionpress..with the kind of format that doesn't make me gag..anyway..this is lovely..i love the 3rd stanza! "so that I wouldn't hurt myself any further"..that is pure skill..don't like the 4th stanza very much..too much repetition..anyway..good job |
| Forever Forbidden 2006-11-01 ch 1, | abuseIT's well written, yet I think the bolded and stressed effects are uneccesary. You've built up enough suspension and feeling into it that it's rather superflous-without it, the reader gets the emotion themselves. Otherwise, great. -Helen |