Holy diver! This story was amazing! I was riveted to it--I couldn't stop reading. Literally. I kept scrolling and I was strangely sad when it ended. Nice ending though, very fitting.

Your characters are so realistic--and I just knew things were going to be different after Rodney shot the corythosaurus. I felt like I was there with them. How cool =).

This is really great, but I think it could go a little slower, detailing their survival in the Jurassic or whatever. Also, you could put in some quotes from the histories and have them be more clueless. I mean, you could have them have no idea what is happening until they get back and start reading it, and have their assimilation more difficult and complete.

Basically, I think this story is really a good sci-fi/time travel one, and all it needs is to be longer.

Moon Child
(a.k.a. Corinna A.)