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| FunkyFlower16 2006-11-04 ch 1,  | abuseawesome imagery and vocab use. i loved the last verse, and the atmosphere u created. keep it up ~_~ ~mez~ |
| Taltush/MeiMei 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abuseI'm trying to see through the pretty imagery and nice words to find the point of the poem, but I'm stuck. This is a pretty poem, certainly, full of metaphors and interesting words, but I don't feel like there's a point, and if there is one, I feel like I'm missing it. I don't understand this in the least. The fact that it's "pretty" doesn't make it good. If I can't figure out what's going on, then it's missing something. It's not bad, just bland. Adding a bit more might help with that. You've got a good idea; just make it more. |