awesome imagery and vocab use. i loved the last verse, and the atmosphere u created. keep it up ~_~

~mez~

I'm trying to see through the pretty imagery and nice words to find the point of the poem, but I'm stuck. This is a pretty poem, certainly, full of metaphors and interesting words, but I don't feel like there's a point, and if there is one, I feel like I'm missing it. I don't understand this in the least. The fact that it's "pretty" doesn't make it good. If I can't figure out what's going on, then it's missing something. It's not bad, just bland. Adding a bit more might help with that. You've got a good idea; just make it more.