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| RodeoGirl 2008-07-09 ch 1,  | abuseVery Good! I really like it! What you said is so true. You said in your profile that you weren't a poet, judging from this, you definitly are a poet! A good one too! God Bless! |
| The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abuseI really liked the clean beat and rhyming. And (for the most part) I liked the message. I was kinda confused by the line "Cleanest will only be found in Hist great land." because it almost makes it seem like you can earn Heaven and the Bible says otherwise (Romans 3:23 and 6:23). But other than that (and that is a pretty big concern) I really liked the poem. Pen.Dragon |
| Twilight Starr 2007-09-28 ch 1, | abuseNice poem. Good luck with poetry and life. Have a wonderful day. :) ~Twilight Starr~ |
| Bandits Sonado 2007-09-12 ch 1, | abuseVery true.Lol.. I like the way this is written, nice rhyming, easy to follow. Good job! ~Ray |
| PM20 2007-03-15 ch 1, | abuseI'm not really religious and still skeptical about God, but I do like this poem. I wish it was a little longer though and some more imagery and detail would be nice as well. I like the way the poem flows, and overall nice work. |
| temporality 2007-03-02 ch 1, | abuseAwesome flow to the poem! The one thing I didn't get was "weave out" in the second line... maybe it's just a weird usage of the language, or do you mean "sift out"? |
| His Mercy's Waiting 2007-02-17 ch 1, | abuseI liked the ideas here, but the rhyming was a bit weak...your poem might've been better without it. Still, it was an enjoyable read. Keep writing for the Lord! :) |
| Worthless 2006-11-26 ch 1, | abuseNot bad, nice rhymin. Keep up the good work! |
| MonsterGirl 2006-11-08 ch 1, | abusei like the flow and the rhyming of everything =) i wish my poems were good like that T.T I can barely rhyme in my poems -_- |
| All Alone With Her Thoughts 2006-11-04 ch 1, | abuseI pray that this will one day happen. Right now, I don't really know... ~Rowan~ |
| Isabella22 2006-11-04 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is really good! Great, no not great, AWESOME job! |
| The Postscript 2006-11-04 ch 1, | abuseIntersting idea. Great rhyming and clarity. Keep writing, s. |
| LalaMoped 2006-11-03 ch 1, | abuseIt's really nice to see christian writings! |
| Crivanea 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abusefirst i must say...i'm not christian..lol..actually..i'm not religious at all..no need for pity..lol..anyway..for ur poem ..i like it..its simple..its short..and its to the point..a bit cliche in the first line..but nothing new..these kind of poem..light and dark..u just can't help it..lol..anyway..nice poem overall..btw..i really appreciate the reviews..it means a lot to me to see people reading it.. |
| Needa S 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abuseIt's different then what I'm used to reading. But I must admit the message is clear. I loved the ending. Nicely done. Write on and God Bless ya. |