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| wordsworth in a garbage can 2006-11-13 ch 4,  | abuseit took me a few times to get this, but you paint it all so wonderfully. |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2006-11-13 ch 3, | abuseall my reviews are so repetitive. the way you intertwined the childish train of thought in here, and mixed it with your modern self (I think?)- it struck me, seriously. so good. it just sped into this masterful thing |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2006-11-13 ch 2, | abusethis is stuff I wish I could write. |
| a lonely september 2006-11-07 ch 4, | abusewow. i think this is my fave so far. i just love it. all of it is so... i dunno so hard to describe but amazing... |
| a lonely september 2006-11-07 ch 3, | abusei love the lines about taffy. nice poem. |
| a lonely september 2006-11-07 ch 2, | abuseoh ** this is amazing. me loves this one. each word perfect, everything is wonderful. love it from beginning to end. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-11-06 ch 2, | abuseVery nice. The rhyme works well in this piece, and I just love that first line of "to sit and sip at acid rain." Good work. Keep writing! :) |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-11-06 ch 1, | abuseI like when people make these little collections of their old poetry. :) |
| jess 2006-11-05 ch 4, anon. | abuseYou know I always thought I hated poetry...your work has proved me wrong over and over again. This needs to be published. I loved how you made some of the words carry over onto the next line and so it had a double meaning-sheer genius. |
| Aquafied 2006-11-05 ch 2, | abusesatanic i cant quite follow |
| Aquafied 2006-11-05 ch 3, | abusei am not sure of this one so much seems a bit young and jagged |
| Aquafied 2006-11-05 ch 4, | abuseself-mutilation is such a sensitive topic |
| lackluster 2006-11-03 ch 3, | abusethis is so random and precious and utterly gorgeous. i mean, the ending stanza is perfect and yet i don't understand how the last line fits in. nice wordplay |
| Aimee Raven 2006-11-03 ch 4, | abuseThere are some really great parts in this..I like your double use of words like in "only sits with/in the dark" it's surprising and creative. It's sad...and I imagine that if you wrote this four or five years ago, it's millions better than what 99.9% of people write at that age. |
| Aimee Raven 2006-11-03 ch 3, | abuse^_^ well ok so the teenage angst shows here a little, but isn't that natural? and once again, if you hadn't mentionned it in your AN, it would never have crossed my mind to think about it! Your writing style has changed, clearly evolved (for the better), but this doesn't want for much...it's peculiar, and well thought out, just not as good as the previous poem, and not as good as your current works. |