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Morgan Davis 2008-10-12 ch 38,	abuseok i have to be honest... i am a little put out by this epilogue. it is realistic true but i mean really... this is such a good book that if you are going to realistic at least expand on it! lol i must say though! I LOVED IT! i feel like it slowed down a bit after their big blowout but i guess that is to expected, but i think it could have been a little more explosive with how they got back together :D just some thoughts to churn the gears. but really now. this epilogue does nothing to slake my lust for more! if i could have you change one thing, it would be this! at least make it longer! T.T but all in all it was a pleasure to read!
Morgan Davis 2008-10-12 ch 35,	abuseOH. EM. GEE. talk abour ripping into one another! HOLY **! no wonder this one the best lover's spat on SKOW i mean HOLY CRAP! i don't think i have EVER seen/read/whatever two people go at it like that! i was absolutely stunned! and Darien was such an A-HOLE! sure she wasn't so light and fluffy herself but COME ON! it is so obvious that she had no malicious intentions! but for real this was so good! you did great with this portayal! (almost too good... have you experience one of these earth shattering fights before?) i can't wait to keep reading!
BelMostra 2008-10-11 ch 39,	abuseI have just finished your story and found it amazing. The first thing that struck me were the parrallels between Darien and Draco Malfoy. Hell, their initials were the same, and then his mention of the remberall and Emma loving Harry Potter furthered that. And the whole Selina Wayne of Wayne enterprises cracked me up, I loved the Batman reference. Anyway, I loved your story. Wel written and extremely addictive.
naufdude 2008-10-10 ch 18,	abusei have to say that this is an excellent idea for a story but i think that you are cramping in way too many problems with the characters mainly Emma... i feel like this story can be better if only you would pay attention to your grammar and spelling... i dont think that it is believable... but that is only my opinion! and there is only so much bickering a reader can take! i mean come on! they are always bickering and i think it is getting Old real fast! but your story has done amazing so i will continue reading it in hopes to see some improvement!
Acantha Alleyoope 2008-10-05 ch 3,	abuseDarien, sorry. I like that clock thing. Ima use it tomorrow.
Acantha Alleyoope 2008-10-05 ch 2,	abuseI can totally picture his Swagger. Hum-de-dum I'm very important etc.
cbprice25 2008-10-04 ch 38,	abuseOkay, I do like this realization: "She can’t create that emotion ... What she does ... is construct the setting for something more to grow." That's what I was trying to get at, what I thought she missed when trying to defend herself. While she did have insecurities, and has -- on numerous occasions -- blamed herself for certain mishaps, I still thought she was perfectly comfortable as the Matchmaker. If this was a realization she had to come to, when she was finally at peace with herself, you might do well to have her aforementioned insecurities more pronounced throughout the story. A little bit of guilt, maybe, that Darien could hit her with. I was also -- and this is in response to the chapter which I previously reviewed -- surprised to hear about how Brock and Rhi's relationship came to fruition. It might be nice to hear a bit more about their relationship -- not everything -- before that admission. It might've also been nicer to hear more about Darien's courtship of the Matchmaker. It was easy to forget about that aspect, especially as Darien's attention got more focused on Emma (which is a good thing), but in order for a good blow-up, you need good ammunition. As readers, without having witnessed plots, we can't fully appreciate them when they're thrown around as evidence. I clicked to see the next chapter automatically, and I admit I was surprised that this was the end of it. The previous chapter ended in Darien's pov, and that irritates. While the epilogue was from Emma's perspective, I still hoped for one last scene. A character's voice is so much more vibrant in dialogue. This epilogue could even be incorporated into a scene, as her inner thoughts as Emma waits for Darien at his locker, for example. Maybe I'm spoiled, but it's nice to have one final touching point, an acknowledgement of how far people come, and it's so much more... (I searched for an adj and then decided to leave it blank.) It's so much more in scene rather than expository. I really enjoyed this one (so much so I still have MUCH to do hmk-wise... I blame you). I'll be keeping an eye out for you! (Ah! There's rhyme -- except not really -- but it still hurts. My apologies!) :)
cbprice25 2008-10-04 ch 35,	abuseI think that she's missing an important argument. She didn't set up people who didn't want to be set up. And she didn't break hearts, she only facilitated it. Life and love (and heartbreak) occur without our help. Just because she sets up a first date doesn't mean she's responsible for the relationship afterwards -- that belongs solidly on those involved. And for something as inevitable as the relationship between Brock and Rhianna seems to be, they would've gotten together without her, only maybe a little later.
whodoyouthink- 2008-10-04 ch 39, anon.	abusei have reviewed another of your works before. and offered insane praise for it. I rewrote the following sentences a gazillion times. - But then i decided no words could describe it. The Matchmaker.
mex.chika 2008-10-03 ch 39,	abuseWow...just...wow. I've spent all my free time i've had these past 3 days reading this story and i have to tell you its incredible. This should be a book!
zephy 2008-10-03 ch 39, anon.	abuseyou know, I really thought you were going to throw in a twist right there and say that Emma and Darien might be half-siblings! phew... great story =) I started reading at 11pm and it's now 5am and I'm going to be so dead for today, but it was so totally worth it!
Genato 2008-10-03 ch 38,	abuseYOU FINISHED IT! not that i'm happy or anything coz it mean it's the end.. i mean.. you know.. there won't be darian and emma goodness anymore. nice. very nice.
x.ablaze 2008-10-02 ch 39,	abuseWOW! amazing! your writing is so detailed and i can picture everything that you're trying to say. ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT
smile at the sun 2008-10-01 ch 38,	abuseGreat story. I loved the characters, the plot, the ending. and the whole Matchmaker idea was very interesting. Great writing.
big.break.and.laryngitis 2008-09-30 ch 39,	abusei have to say that this was the most amazing story i have ever read. the earlier chapters had many grammar and spelling mistakes, but the plot was so good that i couldn't have stopped reading if i'd tried. i started reading this around two years ago, before i'd gotten an account, and then lost track of it because i didn't have a way to put it on story alert. for the past three days i've been rereading it, reading for the first time the ending. and it's amazing. it really ought to be a book, you know. i promise you right now that if i ever find it in a bookstore, i will buy it. and i will tell everyone else i know to buy it. because everything in here, be it or be it not cliched, is true. you're absolutely right about everything you say concerning life, love, and people and human nature in general. your characters, while slightly annoying and single-traited at times, are really amazing. they convey everything that ever mattered to anyone anywhere, and i think that's part of what makes your story so special. i'd like to conclude this review by saying that while you probably know this already, considering the alarming number of reviews you have received, this is, without doubt, one of the greatest stories fictionpress has ever seen.

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