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| Reborn As I 2006-11-03 ch 1,  | abusethe last line stings like a pin through the heart. the rest of the poem seems to be a build up for that last line. i like it. |
| sixPAC 2006-11-03 ch 1, | abuseGreat poem, really well written...i kinda get a fed up feeling from it? I also really like the questioning in there as well. Nice work. |
| rubberduckylove 2006-11-03 ch 1, | abuseThis is cool, you use good um... I dunno... um adjectives? Shoot, ok, this makes sense in my head. What am I trying to say... um... I LIKE THE WORDS YOU USE, THEIR BIG. It sounds like the Stone Sour song. I like how you put the questions in the middle, it makes it more um lively? IT SOUNDS COOL WHEN I READ IT. Gah, I'm trying to be all you know, review-y but I'm tired, and lopy, and it's just coming out retarded. The only part I don't understand is the last line. So close to what? But ... I don't really need to understand it, it's still neat. Oh wait. I get it now that I re read it. Wow, I'm just making myself sound like an idiot so I'm gonna go. Happy review. |